Addition Poem: Birds


An addition poem is an informal form of poetry based upon addition.Here is my first attempt. Hope you will like it.


Birds

Delicate, beautiful

Free tenants of

Air, water and land

Of all shapes and sizes

Perched on branches, swimming, diving, flying

Birds, watchful, agile scavengers or melodious songsters

Winged delights, sparrows, robins, larks, eagles and kites

Swans, pelicans, herons and ducks, jewels of waters alright

Happy feet penguins, ostriches, radiant peacocks, hens, pheasants, land’s pride

No discord, perfect harmony in the birds’ world you will find

Triveni : the three line poems or Triplets


I am an admirer of Gulzar Saheb. He is my muse too. Triveni is unique poetry style developed by him. The trivenis are written with three misra’s (three lines of poetry) where first two lines forms a complete sher and the introduction of third misra(line) gives the sher a new dimension or meaning

Triveni examples of Gulzar

1

maa ne duaaye di thi…
ek chand si dulhan ki….

aaj footpath par laete hue… yeh chand mujhe roti nazar aata hai!

2

kantewali taar par kisne geele kapde tange hain

khoon tapkta hai qur naali me beh jata hai

kyun is fauji ke bewa har roz ye vardi dhoti hai

3.

aaise bikhre hain jaise raat din

motiyon wala haar toot gaya


tumne mujhe piro kar rakha tha

Here is my attempt of writing Triveni. I just call them three line poems, they do not follow the uniqueness of Gulzar Saheb’s work but still it is a first attempt towards a new verse form. These triplets do not have the same pattern as the Triveni of Gulzar.

1

Paani ki ek mauj
aayi aur chupke se baha le gayi
pyar ka ret gharaunda

2
beti ki kilkari
nadi ki satah par kuch bulbule
aur phir sab shant
3

Shaam ke surmayi adhere me
phighal raha hai dheere dheere
uska gum e tanhayi
4.

sharabor hain bageeche ki deeware
barish se ug aati hai kayi unpar
yaden hari ho gayi hain

5.
Kabhi yunhi jek jagah tham jata hai samay
jad pakad leta hai
darakhton ki tarah

6.
Thak kar ghar jate huye maan me ek sawal
kisko khilaun, kisko bhookha marun
aaj ki raat
7.

door vadi me khile hai
gul bahar ke phoor
jaise jal uththe hon lakho diye ek hi sath

8.
Syah raat
ghati se bansuri ki aawaz aur ek jalta diya
shayad koi premi hai
9.

ek ujda purana makan
gilehri, parinde, kutte
naye bashinde
10.

sookhe darakht
phir se dikha
wahi neela samandar

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