Triveni : the three line poems or Triplets


I am an admirer of Gulzar Saheb. He is my muse too. Triveni is unique poetry style developed by him. The trivenis are written with three misra’s (three lines of poetry) where first two lines forms a complete sher and the introduction of third misra(line) gives the sher a new dimension or meaning

Triveni examples of Gulzar

1

maa ne duaaye di thi…
ek chand si dulhan ki….

aaj footpath par laete hue… yeh chand mujhe roti nazar aata hai!

2

kantewali taar par kisne geele kapde tange hain

khoon tapkta hai qur naali me beh jata hai

kyun is fauji ke bewa har roz ye vardi dhoti hai

3.

aaise bikhre hain jaise raat din

motiyon wala haar toot gaya


tumne mujhe piro kar rakha tha

Here is my attempt of writing Triveni. I just call them three line poems, they do not follow the uniqueness of Gulzar Saheb’s work but still it is a first attempt towards a new verse form. These triplets do not have the same pattern as the Triveni of Gulzar.

1

Paani ki ek mauj
aayi aur chupke se baha le gayi
pyar ka ret gharaunda

2
beti ki kilkari
nadi ki satah par kuch bulbule
aur phir sab shant
3

Shaam ke surmayi adhere me
phighal raha hai dheere dheere
uska gum e tanhayi
4.

sharabor hain bageeche ki deeware
barish se ug aati hai kayi unpar
yaden hari ho gayi hain

5.
Kabhi yunhi jek jagah tham jata hai samay
jad pakad leta hai
darakhton ki tarah

6.
Thak kar ghar jate huye maan me ek sawal
kisko khilaun, kisko bhookha marun
aaj ki raat
7.

door vadi me khile hai
gul bahar ke phoor
jaise jal uththe hon lakho diye ek hi sath

8.
Syah raat
ghati se bansuri ki aawaz aur ek jalta diya
shayad koi premi hai
9.

ek ujda purana makan
gilehri, parinde, kutte
naye bashinde
10.

sookhe darakht
phir se dikha
wahi neela samandar

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5 thoughts on “Triveni : the three line poems or Triplets

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  2. superb writing tikuli. you are so well read, thanks for introducing me to wonderful triveni writing by gulzaar saab. your attempts are really good and with time i am sure they will get better 🙂 keep writing

    thanks so much Ani.. Yes practice will help me improve. 🙂

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  3. i dont know ur name and saying tikuli is somthing …….. any ways…. first thing ur writings are superb. full of poetic feelings and abovre all gr8 word selections
    but they are slightly different from trivenis. in triveni the third line should be entirely different from the first two. yet it has to provide epitome of the whole feeling…….. jaise ….

    samne aaye mere, dekha mujhe, baat bhi ki
    muskuraye bhi purane kisi rishte ke liye

    kal ka akhbaar tha bus dekh liya rakh bhi diya .

    as u say to leave ur heartprints thats y i wrote all thes things… thankx

    satya

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  4. i dont know ur name and saying tikuli is somthing …….. any ways…. first thing ur writings are superb. fulll of poetic feeling and gr* word arrangement. but they are slightly different from trivenis. in triveni the third line should be entirely different from the first two. yet it has to provide epitome of the whole feeling…….. jaise ….

    samne aaye mere, dekha mujhe, baat bhi ki
    muskuraye bhi purane kisi rishte ke liye

    kal ka akhbaar tha bus dekh liya rakh bhi diya .
    as u have said to leave ur heart print thats y i wrote all these .

    🙂 Thanks and welcome to my blog. Yes they are different from Gulzar saheb’s triveni , these are just three line poems. I will try and write in the same way as he does.
    Tikuli is my name .. it means bindiya. 🙂
    Will hop over to your blog and read. keep visiting and do leave your precious views. Thanks again

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  5. Its amazing poem writing actully i love poems.And the basic theme that is spinning the yarn of life its just a great theme..all the very best for further writing of poem.

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